Hello, Sweet Saturday Samplers! Before we get started on another excerpt from my WIP, Elly and the Geriatrics, I'd like to give a big THANK YOU to J. Gunnar Grey for hosting this group. Your work is sincerely appreciated, Gunnar.
In my scene today, Elly has just picked up a few items at the local Shop 'N Hop for her grandmother.
Elly
stowed her purchases in the golf cart's bin, started the engine, and headed
back to the trailer park. She smiled, remembering Granny’s reprimand that
Sunset Acres was a manufactured-home village, not a trailer park, which was something else entirely. As if only
the upper crust of Shannon
Ridge
As
if Elly could get to know anybody in the neighborhood. If the homeowners’
association—the Geriatric Government—caught her still living with her grandma,
they’d kick her out on her ass. And then what would happen? Although Granny was
doing much better, she still couldn’t get around very well. Until
the doctor gave her a clean bill of health, Elly was determined to do whatever
she could to help her grandmother get back on her feet—literally. So if that
meant sneaking around like a criminal, hiding from the Geriatrics, and putting
her own life on hold, so be it.
Elly
pulled the cart into its parking spot beneath the carport cover, her mind on
the day ahead. Her tasks included a start on something she’d planned from her
first day with Granny—a complete reorganization of the house. She looked
forward to the challenge. Last week, Elly had measured the dimensions of the
trailer and each of its rooms, excited to be using what she’d learned from her
interior design degree to create a more efficient layout for the small space. She just hoped Granny would agree to her changes. 
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I feel quite excited about her porposed changes for her gandmother, and reckon there's going to be a 'reckoning' before long with the 'geriatrics'.
ReplyDeleteYes, the Geriatric Government does cause Elly some grief. Thanks for leaving a comment.
DeleteWhat a great sample. I love the premise! And the picture is perfect. It's going on my buy list.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Patricia. I visited a nearby mobile home community and took tons of pictures. I liked this one best because of the turquoise color.
DeleteThat picture is perfect. Did you take it yourself? Thanks for another good excerpt.
ReplyDeleteHi, Elaine. Yes, I took that picture, and I'm thinking it might be good as part of the cover. I need to play around with it some. Glad you enjoyed today's post.
DeleteGreat sample. I loved the details. You conveyed alot in the snippet.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Tmonique. This is part of Chapter 2, so I'm trying to introduce the main characters and start establishing their relationships.
DeleteAnother great scene. I can't wait to find out what Derek does/says when he finds her living there
ReplyDeleteHi, Lindsay. Derek's a good guy--maybe too good. I think I need to give him some faults. That's hard to do with our heroes, isn't it?
DeleteI am so loving this story! Elly is a spunky little thing, isn't she? And the pic is wonderful! Is the turquoise house Granny's? It should be. LOL More, more, more!
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DeleteYes, Jenna, Granny's house is the turquoise one. I didn't know that until after I looked at the photos I'd taken, but that one fits her personality.
DeleteI almost want to live there, lol! (I don't think the Geriatric Govt would take kindly to our pigs ... or our children. Or us, I guess, in our 30s. *grin*) I can't wait to find out what happens when she meets Derek. And I think it's awesome you took these pics yourself!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Sarah, for your feedback. I enjoy taking pictures and take dozens of whatever subject I'm focused on. Surely one will turn out good! BTW, the dessert photo is from J. Gunnar Grey's website.
ReplyDeleteI'm really enjoying this story! I like the looks into Elly's mind, and the descriptions of the community.
ReplyDeleteI'm glad you're enjoying it, Carrie-Anne. I'm having fun writing (er...rewriting) it.
DeleteWhat wonderful character development. A great story!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Peggy. BTW, I may have mentioned this before, but one of our characters in IOU SEX is named Peggy!
DeleteLove your characters, love your story, love the turquoise!
ReplyDeleteThanks for leaving a comment, Sandra. I love turquoise too. In fact, I'm wearing a turquoise blouse today.
DeleteWhat an intriguing snippet....I do love reading excerpts, and would like to showcase mine, too.
ReplyDeleteI'm going to check out your meme.
I loved the distinction between "trailer" and "manufactured" home. I remember making that distinction with some folks, myself, when I almost bought a lovely manufactured home in the foothills.
Sounds like a good setting for a mystery!