More from Elly
and the Geriatrics, my WIP, for this week’s Sweet Saturday Sample. In this
scene, Elly is packing up the unsold items from their rummage sale table when
Mrs. Bagley, the President of the Sunset Acres Homeowner’s Association, stops
by. Jeremy is Mrs. Bagley’s trouble-maker nephew.
Mrs. Bagley turned and looked around the room. The chain affixed
to her eyeglass frames jiggled. “Jeremy stayed with me for a while but,
unfortunately, he was forced to leave.” She paused, her smile gone, and raised thin
eyebrows. “Our homeowners’ association has a rule that young people can visit
for one month, then they have to go. One month. I assume you’re aware of that
restriction?”
Elly searched her mind for the right response. She wondered if
the Bagley woman knew she’d been living with Granny almost twice that long.
“Yes, ma’am,” Elly answered, limiting her response to as few
words as possible.
“Well, just so you know. We won’t tolerate any breaking or
bending of our covenants.” She fixed Elly with a glare, her forehead ribbed
with rows of wrinkles.
Elly clamped her teeth together, holding back the rude retort
that came to mind.
“And another thing.” The woman’s frown deepened and she leaned
closer. “I saw you talking to our groundskeeper. I’d be careful around that
young man if I were you. He has a way with plants, but from what I've heard
....” She paused and sniffed. "...he has an unsavory past regarding women."
Elly swallowed a gasp.
Unsavory?
Derek? He seemed like such a nice guy.
But
then, so had Rick.
Just then Granny walked up and interrupted. “Why, hello,
Marybeth. How is Jeremy these days?” Her voice dripped with honey. “I'm so
sorry to hear he had a little trouble with the sheriff over in Fannin County.”
Mrs. Bagley backed away. “All a misunderstanding, I’m sure. Just
normal high spirits in a young man.” She pinned Elly with a glare. “Remember
what I said.” Then she turned as quickly as her cane would allow and hobbled
away.
Once the woman was out of earshot, Granny let out a hiss. “Old
sow. She’ll be spying on us like a fox watching a henhouse. We’ll have to be
more careful.”
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ReplyDeleteSandra, for some reason blogger won't accept the HTML that has been accepted every previous time.
DeleteMeanwhile, I love your characters. You've really livened things up as you've added the old biddy...lol
Trying one more time...lol
ReplyDeleteMY SWEET SATURDAY SAMPLE
Thanks, Laurel! Loved your post today.
DeleteThat Marybeth sure is a trouble maker
ReplyDeleteYes, she is. I'm having fun with her.
DeleteOoo, I smell trouble ahead. Good scene!
ReplyDeleteDerek does have a secret... to be revealed later.
DeleteOld troublemaker. I like the sound of Derek.
ReplyDeleteI like him too, Elaine. He's basically a good guy.
DeleteYour characters are absolutely wonderful--I have them totally envisioned in my mind! This was a great episode with all kinds of questions and possible scenarios rambling through my head.
ReplyDeleteLove your post!
Thanks so much, Sandra! I'm working on edits right now. Will they EVER get done??
DeleteThis is such a great story! The characters come to life on the page. Can't wait to see more of Derek. And the old biddy! She's priceless. Good luck on the edits!
ReplyDeleteI'm so glad you like my characters. Now if I can just get them to behave! Elly just won't do what I have in mind, so that's changing the plot.
DeleteNot only are your characters engaging, but the dialouge is great. Keep going!
ReplyDeleteWhat nice compliments! I appreciate your encouragement.
DeleteI love the setup of the conflict and the characters!
ReplyDeleteI can't wait for this to be available on my Kindle. :-)
ReplyDeleteI love the gramma character even though there was just a snippet of her in the excerpt. Lol, I loved the "Old sow" comment. It made me think of my own Ma-maw. :)
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