Sunday, May 22, 2011

6 SENTENCE SUNDAY - May 22



We got such a positive response last week that we're continuing with Peggy, one of the three women in I.O.U. SEX who's on a hunt for her high school boyfriend (decades after graduation!) 
Setup: Peggy is meeting with private investigator James Hornby, intent on hiring him to find her high school boyfriend.


"How long do you anticipate this search will take?" Peggy cringed at the pleading note that crept into her voice, wondering if Hornby's dismissive looks or the run she'd just noticed in her pantyhose had caused her self-confidence to flee so quickly. She crossed her legs to hide the unsightly tear.
She wished he'd quit clicking that darned pen and fiddling with his frigging Blueberry or Raspberry or whatever it was called. Peggy suppressed the urge to reach across the desk, snatch it out of his hands, and fling it across the room. Instead, she clasped her hands in her lap, her need of the man's services overriding her desire to cram his electronic toy up his nose. 

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27 comments:

  1. Action! Sweet six.

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  2. Her noticing the tear in the pantyhose and its eroding her confidence is priceless. Also, I suspect his Blueberry would be quite a different thing to fiddle with than his Blackberry! Loved this six!

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  3. Too funny! I love real life stories.

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  4. Very cute! Thanks for sharing your six.

    Best,
    Allure

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  5. Hee! I wonder how long she'll be able to resist the urge! Nice.

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  6. Oh, I so love this! Hate runs in pantyhose, and I've heard it called a 'crackberry' many times. :)

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  7. You did a good job of showing and not telling re how her tension and nervousness was escalating.

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  8. (giggle.) A raspberry? Very funny.

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  9. Very cute six. Makes me want to read the book, so good job.

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  10. Very fun six! Personally, I'd love to see her ram his "raspberry" up his nose, lol! Might be funny!

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  11. ROFL. Cram the damn thing up his...where the sun don't shine

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  12. I love Peggy's sass even if her confidence is waning. And she is clearly not a techno geek, is she? Great job.

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  13. Oh my gosh I loved this. So visual. Haven't we all experienced a run in our nylons. And I can so relate to him playing with his blackberry - love the way she acted like she didn't know what it was (I can relate). Excellent six. I'd love to read this.

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  14. Forgot to ask,where is this available?

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  15. Thanks for asking, Roseanne! I.O.U. Sex is available as an eBook but we're working on getting it into paperback within the next few weeks. In the meantime, you can get it on Amazon (Kindle), Barnes & Noble (Nook), and Smashwords (for a bunch of other devices). See the "Buy the I.O.U. Sex" tab at the top of this page for details.

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  16. Great job. Love that she can't remember what it's called. Thanks for visiting my blog, too. The name of the movie the picture is from is His Girl Friday. (Love Cary Grant.)

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  17. Great expressive character. She's a riot to read about.

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  18. "electronic toy up his nose" very funny line!

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  19. I just moved IOU Sex from my Wish List to my TBR folder on my Kindle.

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  20. Thanks for all the kind comments. One of Peggy's distinguishing characteristics is her love of homey sayings, so it was a lot of fun to put those words in her mouth. We'll add some of her dialog in coming weeks.

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  21. Great six lines. Love the Raspberry.

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  22. Blueberry or Raspberry? LOL. Lots of nice humor in this six.

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  23. I love this. Not my usual genre for reading, but I so would.

    Great characterisation in six lines :)

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  24. nice six! good humor and it makes me want to know more!

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  25. Great Six! Love the humor of it :)

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