Saturday, April 21, 2012

Sweet Saturday Sample - April 21

After all the kind comments and encouragement I received following last Saturday’s post from my WIP (tentatively titled Electra and the Geriatrics), I’m moving forward with the story. Last week you met my protagonist Elly. Today’s post gives you a peek at my hero Derek.


      Derek watched the heavy gate clang shut. He’d recognized Mrs. Macauley’s distinctive ride and waved, but she must not have seen him.
      Where is she headed, all by herself? Should I have stopped her?
       He’d started to shout a greeting, then changed his mind.
       Probably not.
       Those senior citizens can be damned independent.
       He chuckled.
       Especially Mrs. M.  A real ball of fire ‘til she’d fractured her ankle.
       He shrugged, stepped back under the oak’s branches, and leaned on his shovel.
       Must be feeling better if she's running around in her golf cart.
       He wondered what had happened to the granddaughter who’d been helping her. He’d seen her a couple of times at the rec center right after Mrs. M fell off that curb. Nice-looking woman. Her relation to her grandmother was obvious—red hair, lanky build, though the granddaughter was taller. But for one reason or another, they’d never met. Probably just as well.
       Derek turned and resumed his work beneath the native red oak. The neighborhood’s gardening committee had decreed that the entrance to Sunset Acres Retirement Village be spruced up this spring, and their first project included putting flowers beneath the tree’s branches. As their landscaper, he wasn’t too hopeful of the plan’s success. He’d tried his damnedest to convince them that the roses and daylilies they wanted would never survive in the shade at the oak’s tangled roots, but the ladies on the committee wanted colorful blooms. He hoped a few azaleas, with impatiens and begonias in bright ceramic pots, would satisfy them. Of course, they would have to approve his choices. The whole thing would take on a drama far out of proportion to the importance of the issue. He shook his head and chuckled, imagining their heated discussion.
       Good thing he could find humor in his situation. By now he’d hoped to be settled down with a wife and kids, heading up a successful landscape design company. Instead, here he was, pushing thirty and still working toward those dreams.
       He put a foot to the shovel’s blade and spaded up a mound of mulch, then spread the top-dressing over the hard-packed ground. What a life. But right now, there wasn’t an alternative.

I hope you enjoyed today's excerpt. You'll find more Sweet Saturday Samples here: The Sweet List



24 comments:

  1. So now we have two people stuck living lives they hadn't planned. Bet they'll help each other out! Thanks for sharing.

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    1. Yep. You guessed it!
      Thanks for the feedback.

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    1. He is a great guy. In fact, I'm going to have to do some editing to give him some faults. Right now he's TOO good!

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  3. He sounds interesting. I wonder what has been holding him back.

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    1. Thanks for visiting, Rachel. I'm hoping your curiosity would make you turn the page to the next chapter!

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  4. He's got a lot going on under the surface. Great sample.

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    1. Yes, he does have a lot going on. He's interesting to me, and I hope everybody else likes him as much as I do.

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  5. I think he's destined to meet the red head!

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  6. Love the teasers! When will the book be out??

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    1. Hi, Ruth. The book isn't quite finished, but I hope it doesn't take me too much longer to edit it to my satisfaction. I'll make a big announcement on that day, for sure!

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  7. Nice introduction to his character. I like the idea of setting a romance in a retirement home.

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    1. Thanks for the comment, Carrie-Anne. Actually, this is the end of Chapter One. I introduced Elly in the first part of the chapter. The story is set in a mobile home community for retirees.

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  8. You do a great job of not only giving us a glimpse of Derek, but of the neighborhood as a whole. I feel like I know them already - LOVE the part about the discussion taking on drama out of proportion to the issue. (I see that happen all the time with my kids, and you've described it perfectly!)

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    1. Thanks, Sarah! What nice compliments. You just made my day.
      I see the same sort of thing in a group that I'm a part of too. Guess it's just human nature.

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  9. Missed you last week, but love this week's excerpt. Love a man who has a life plan and a landscaper is a different occupation for a hero. I like it. I agree with Sarah, you have introduced us to the community and his outlook in a subtle and terrific way.

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    1. Though I love policemen and firemen heroes, it was fun to write about a guy who loves flowers and plants. But he's still a manly man.

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  10. So visiual I truly felt I was in your scene, and loved the way you wove in Derek's dreams.

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    1. Thank you, Sherry. I hoped to introduce both characters and give a little info about their lives in Chapter 1.

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